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第二首,这次低调一点。:P

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兰若
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谢dingding, 我会好好学的。。。:)


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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-7 12:23 AM:
夜雨

花摇露中影
叶举绒上珠
坐听灯下曲
风卷云里舒

如果原诗保留,和修改过的比较,进步了,还是退步了,便一目了然。
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好,俺贴上原诗。。。:)


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俺也要酸一回。

夜雨

急急入沟渠
纷纷乱人影
淡淡且睡去
管它大大雨


欲说还休,欲说还休。不说也罢。


   
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