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第一首古诗,第一首古诗啊

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兰若
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空竹

空竹无声岁月轻
暖花落定去日明
痴语絮絮不知者
却是节节林中风

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欢迎大家狂砸,我会好好修改, 我不懂平仄啥的,看着大家写手痒瞎写的。。我写古诗新诗的感觉很不同,我觉得新诗更象纸上的自己。。。


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Sorry I can't say in Chinese now. Just take 1st position as you always support my thread;-)

P.s., you can take a few minutes to review the rule of the classic. I don't think that would be difficult. Anyway, depending on what you think...

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哎,兰若,你这一步走得太快:)



   
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Originally posted by [i]dingding[/i] at 2006-6-2 06:25 AM:
Sorry I can't say in Chinese now. Just take 1st position as you always support my thread;-)

P.s., you can take a few minutes to review the rule of the classic. I don't think that would be diffic..

谢谢dingding, 不急,准备好了砖头先。。。。:P


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Originally posted by [i]况也[/i] at 2006-6-2 06:36 AM:
哎,兰若,你这一步走得太快:)

况也,我知道你是啥意思,是不是想让我写那什么现代古诗?嘿嘿,就不。。。:lol: 😆 😆


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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-2 06:09 AM:
空竹

空竹无声岁月轻
暖花落定去日明
痴语絮絮不知者
却是节节林中风

************
欢迎大家狂砸,我会好好修改, 我不懂平仄啥的,看着大家写手痒瞎写的。。我写古诗新诗的感觉很不同,我觉得新诗更象..

兰若好诗!只是"暖花落定去日明"一句有点不太明了.

我对平仄论的看法如下:
不管南腔北调,皆以北京普通话为准.一二声为平,三四声为仄.作起诗来,平仄有序,错落有致,听起来节奏感强,尽量流利不碍口就行了.



   
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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-2 06:48 AM:

谢谢dingding, 不急,准备好了砖头先。。。。:P

兰若,

我这个人, 按你说的, "敏感", 所以"写"诗; "认真", 又"写"不了诗, 所以在那"半掉"子;-)

你真想"写"? 建议先看看"平仄"规则. 不管今后你"写"不写"古诗词", 看别人的, 也有帮助.

有人烦"戴镣铐"跳舞, 但这种"舞法", 岂能是一个简单的"烦"字;-)

你知道"凡高"的绘画基础非常扎实, 素描的底子非常好, 题外话...



   
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“第一首古诗啊”,叫起来惊天动地。
喜欢你这股咋呼劲,对这诗倒没啥感觉。


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谢谢大家,尤其是dingding贴了这么长的科普东东,我想学学,因为我也很喜欢古诗的美,不过写起来,我还是喜欢新诗那种潇洒劲。。。。:)


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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-2 05:20 PM:
谢谢大家,尤其是dingding贴了这么长的科普东东,我想学学,因为我也很喜欢古诗的美,不过写起来,我还是喜欢新诗那种潇洒劲。。。。:)

这就是"追求"的不同了, "少林""武当", "啤酒""果酒";-) 有人喜欢芭蕾, 我就喜欢滑冰;-)
P.S., 我将删去ZT. 我知道很多人不喜欢...



   
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dingding, 你删了干嘛啊,我还没看完呢,别人不喜欢是别人的事,闭上眼睛就好了,,,自己想贴就贴啊,要不多累啊,再贴出来吧。。。:) 让我保存一下。。。

而且我很理解你关于凡高的比喻,这就是一个厚积薄发的过程,我喜欢pure的东西,要古就pure古,要新就pure新,这也是为什么我的很多朋友都批评我爱走极端的原因。。。。:)


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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-2 06:09 AM:
空竹

空竹无声岁月轻
暖花落定去日明
痴语絮絮不知者
却是节节林中风

************
欢迎大家狂砸,我会好好修改, 我不懂平仄啥的,看着大家写手痒瞎写的。。我写古诗新诗的感觉很不同,我觉得新诗更象..

好啊,古诗也出来了。佩服佩服。:P 😛 要是在别的地方看到,还可能真的以为是哪位古代大诗人写的呢。哈哈。:lol: 不过可惜我不会翻译古诗,所以这这首不能翻。 😉 别的砖就不砸啦。



   
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灵沼,我想表达的是,落花终有归期的意思,哎,功力不够,待我慢慢修炼。。。:)

梦文,谢谢你,虽然你在揶挪我,呵呵,还好我自己知道自己几两沉。。。:)


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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-4 03:56 AM:
灵沼,我想表达的是,落花终有归期的意思,哎,功力不够,待我慢慢修炼。。。:)

梦文,谢谢你,虽然你在揶挪我,呵呵,还好我自己知道自己几两沉。。。:)

兰若,谢谢你。但这是善意的玩笑,不是在“揶挪(讽刺)”你哟。:o 🙂 我现在还是要说,我真的觉得你这首诗很好,不比真正的古诗差。我看就这样定了吧。:)



   
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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-4 03:56 AM:
灵沼,我想表达的是,落花终有归期的意思,哎,功力不够,待我慢慢修炼。。。:)

空竹无声岁月轻
落花有期红尘重

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