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[原创]细水长流

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weili
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逼着你说嘛。
不知不觉中,感觉我的诗风介于兆阳和象罔之间。水平嘛,当然还是差多了。:(

Originally posted by [i]zhaoyang[/i] at 2008-4-4 10:26 PM:
最后一段,是可以的。你写的无非就是雾落水滴成流,然后加上那么多花架子,什么地心什么的。写诗如坐禅,禅意可得,不可道说


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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吹牛吧。为力



   
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有其师必有其徒。吹牛也得向你学。

Originally posted by [i]zhaoyang[/i] at 2008-4-6 06:47 PM:
吹牛吧。为力


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按建议去掉了两个字。:))


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有意思,不过这次我不得已要同意zhaoyang同学一次,他的点评“这次”还是很到位的~ :)


思无邪.


   
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