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(@lantian)
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夏天
象一只鸟儿
叼走了我的小秘密
飞走
停落在
天上的云彩
使我
永远放飞飘渺



   
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 wxll
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言简意赅。

Originally posted by [i]lantian[/i] at 2006-11-5 09:51 PM:
夏天
象一只鸟儿
叼走了我的小秘密
飞走
停落在
天上的云彩
使我
永远放飞飘渺



   
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冰花
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夏天

BY LANTIAN

夏天
象一只鸟儿
叼了我的小秘密
飞走
停落在
天上的云彩
使我
永远放飞飘渺

WOW, 蓝天这几句非常妙!

很有灵气很精巧!

好诗!

Originally posted by [i]lantian[/i] at 2006-11-6 01:51 AM:
夏天
象一只鸟儿
叼走了我的小秘密
飞走
停落在
天上的云彩
使我
永远放飞飘渺


沉默是金
http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/binghuablog


   
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蓝天, 我帮你去掉一个走, 加个题目

夏天
象一只鸟儿
叼(走)了我的小秘密
飞走
停落在
天上的云彩
使我
永远放飞飘渺 ----这句最好!


沉默是金
http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/binghuablog


   
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先磨也写几句如何?

Originally posted by [i]wxll[/i] at 2006-11-6 01:54 AM:
言简意赅。


沉默是金
http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/binghuablog


   
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就是张个可爱的脸蛋,看不出性格来。
切,你们的口味就这么高呀!:D


我在低处,只能和低下头来的人说话,,,


   
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是呀, 外表美是天生的, 自己无法选择, 内心的美比外表的美更重要. 而气质多是靠后天的修养.

我知道蒲大姐是在和我们开玩笑, 后边的小:D告密了. 哈哈, 问好!

Originally posted by [i]pugongying[/i] at 2006-11-6 02:53 AM:
就是张个可爱的脸蛋,看不出性格来。
切,你们的口味就这么高呀!:D


沉默是金
http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/binghuablog


   
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蓝天,

我把你写的ZT走了!


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Originally posted by [i]冰花[/i] at 2006-11-6 03:07 AM:
是呀, 外表美是天生的, 自己无法选择, 内心的美比外表的美更重要. 而气质多是靠后天的修养.

我知道蒲大姐是在和我们开玩笑, 后边的小:D告密了. 哈哈, 问好!

冰花,谁向你告什么密了?我可最不爱玩告密游戏的。:wink:
我也曾经喜欢过很多明星的可爱脸蛋,但是现在变老了,总爱从一张脸上读出点什么。读不出东西的脸蛋,很难让我喜欢。
😎


我在低处,只能和低下头来的人说话,,,


   
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Originally posted by [i]冰花[/i] at 2006-11-6 02:44 AM:
蓝天, 我帮你去掉一个走, 加个题目

夏天
象一只鸟儿
叼(走)了我的小秘密
飞走
停落在
天上的云彩
使我
永远放飞飘渺 ----这句最好!

我随便涂几字,也算诗吗?脸红!:wink:



   
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写诗往往是一时的灵感使然, 你随便涂的几字,不但也算诗, 而且还是好诗!:wink:

Originally posted by [i]lantian[/i] at 2006-11-6 04:06 AM:

我随便涂几字,也算诗吗?脸红!:wink:


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太为难我了。我只会评不会写,正如会品味不会炒菜的人一样。

Originally posted by [i]冰花[/i] at 2006-11-5 10:44 PM:
先磨也写几句如何?



   
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哈哈, 先磨, 那就不难为你写诗了, 但要给你留一个HOMEWORK, 发挥你的特长, 罚你写个诗评吧,不是说评这首, 我那么多诗随便你挑, 评哪首都行, 总评更欢迎, 你如何评也由你, 你敢不敢接这个HOMEWORK 呀!?

Originally posted by [i]wxll[/i] at 2006-11-6 08:21 PM:
太为难我了。我只会评不会写,正如会品味不会炒菜的人一样。


沉默是金
http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/binghuablog


   
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I will not do it untill next spring as I have so many things to deal with now.



   
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是吗?给你个HUG吧。:laugh:

Originally posted by [i]冰花[/i] at 2006-11-5 02:32 PM:
如梦好!

你说得很好也很对'夏日的温情,会变成秋天的成熟和蕴籍,深藏在心底".这正是我要表达的.

你挺懂我啊?!



   
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