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第一首古诗,第一首古诗啊

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fanghuzhai
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"哎,兰若,你这一步走得太快"

这句话我怎么觉着有点歧义啊?



   
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Originally posted by [i]fanghuzhai[/i] at 2006-6-6 02:27 PM:
"哎,兰若,你这一步走得太快"

这句话我怎么觉着有点歧义啊?


老方, 响应号召, 多批评少捧场.



   
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俺也和一首:

咏竹

萧瑟万木凋
烛天翠更娇
青衣裹素腹
节固霜雪消



   
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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-6-2 06:35 PM:
dingding, 你删了干嘛啊,我还没看完呢,别人不喜欢是别人的事,闭上眼睛就好了,,,自己想贴就贴啊,要不多累啊,再贴出来吧。。。:) 让我保存一下。。。

而且我很理解你关于凡高的比喻,这就是一个厚积薄发..

兰若, 如果真想看, 容我再找来. 不过, 许多地方都有. 你告诉我的那个网站, 就有FOX等诗友写的介绍;-) 至于"纯", 个人的看法不同. 不过我认同你的观点;-)



   
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Originally posted by [i]灵沼[/i] at 2006-6-6 08:21 AM:

空竹无声岁月轻
落花有期红尘重

???

谢灵沼,不过我觉得这样写,整个诗的风格就从飘逸偏重了,容我再想想。。。再次感谢! 🙂


思无邪.


   
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Originally posted by [i]fanghuzhai[/i] at 2006-6-6 02:27 PM:
"哎,兰若,你这一步走得太快"

这句话我怎么觉着有点歧义啊?

啥意思? 😛 有没有专门能让我这智障人士听懂的话啊?:cool:


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Originally posted by [i]白荒地[/i] at 2006-6-6 03:23 PM:
俺也和一首:

咏竹

萧瑟万木凋
烛天翠更娇
青衣裹素腹
节固霜雪消

好诗,白荒地,喜欢。。。我又写了一首,等会贴出来。。。:)


思无邪.


   
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Originally posted by [i]dingding[/i] at 2006-6-6 07:30 PM:

兰若, 如果真想看, 容我再找来. 不过, 许多地方都有. 你告诉我的那个网站, 就有FOX等诗友写的介绍;-) 至于"纯", 个人的看法不同. 不过我认同你的观点;-)

我已经古狗啦,现已学了个大概,等会再贴一首,,,不过我按新四声确定平仄就行了,不想钻故纸堆啦。。。谢dingding...:)


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谢谢兰若,说起来你不信,你的笔名同我的四姨真名一样:)

我的那首古诗自己也颇得意,准备用毛笔写了,然后裱起来挂在书房。想起来怪,为什么大家没有将现代诗挂起来呢:)

>>>>俺也和一首:

咏竹

萧瑟万木凋
烛天翠更娇
青衣裹素腹
节固霜雪消

好诗,白荒地,喜欢。。。我又写了一首,等会贴出来。。。



   
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Originally posted by [i]白荒地[/i] at 2006-6-7 06:32 PM:
谢谢兰若,说起来你不信,你的笔名同我的四姨真名一样:)

我的那首古诗自己也颇得意,准备用毛笔写了,然后裱起来挂在书房。想起来怪,为什么大家没有将现代诗挂起来呢:)

>>>>俺也和一首:
..

其实也不奇怪啊,就象看见有人把滕王阁序裱起来, 却没看见有人把红楼梦哪一章裱起来不是?:-P体裁不一样,欣赏的方式也不同哈,就好像鲜花和美女,有这样美的,有那样美的,嘿嘿,这世上养眼的东东很多,自个把眼闭上可是自个的损失哈。。。:cool:


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我也隆重推出我的第一首古诗,:P:P:P 和兰若诗 空竹 😛

冷叶

失足有声岁月重
冷叶未落来日浓
废话滔滔有知音
不是妹妹腹中空

没有任何实际意思,纯粹好玩。哈哈,其实是填字游戏啦。赫赫。Microsoft Pinyin IME 真好,找字和押运真方便
注解:
空竹-实竹 –> 失足 😀
节节-姐姐 –> 妹妹 😀



   
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Just a suggestion -

空竹

空竹无声岁月轻
尘埃落去来日明
痴语絮絮不知者
却是林中节节风


是非是我非我


   
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In fact, there's nothing for 落花终有归期的意思 in the original one.

Don't foget your title of the peom.


是非是我非我


   
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唉,我算是明白为什么许由要洗耳朵了。我也要洗洗眼睛了。
你们哪。。。也一把岁数了吧?



   
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二老板,怎么啦?我看不出这里有什么不对呀。怎么还“一把岁数”呢?你指望这里的人都是小孩吗?唉。你保重了。



   
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