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兰若
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我慢慢的打开灯
慢慢的沐浴,
慢慢的梳头。
慢慢的
把自己放在床单上
让自己
象水一样自由的蒸发

真的很慢
包括哈欠和懒腰
包括叹息和每一个翻身的动作
棉被很柔软
空气慢慢的浸透

真的 在有些时候
在没有人提醒的时候

就是一种幸福


思无邪.


   
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我发现你的好几首诗都与液体有关:沐浴、蒸发、浸透,还有水、血、泪、雪等等,女性写作特征很浓。



   
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I like this one. Here is my tentative translation.
🙂

SLOWLY
- by 兰若

I slowly turn on the light
Slowly take shower
Slowly comb my hair
And slowly
Lay myself onto the bedsheet
And let myself
Evaporate freely like water

Really slowly
Even for a yawn or a stretch
For a sigh or for every turn in bed
The cotton comforter is very soft
And the air slowly permeates

Really, sometimes
When no one reminds me
Slowing down
Is really a bliss

我慢慢的打开灯
慢慢的沐浴,
慢慢的梳头。
慢慢的
把自己放在床单上
让自己
象水一样自由的蒸发

真的很慢
包括哈欠和懒腰
包括叹息和每一个翻身的动作
棉被很柔软
空气慢慢的浸透

真的 在有些时候
在没有人提醒的时候

就是一种幸福



   
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兰若
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Originally posted by [i]wxll[/i] at 2006-4-29 06:57 AM:
我发现你的好几首诗都与液体有关:沐浴、蒸发、浸透,还有水、血、泪、雪等等,女性写作特征很浓。

犀利,目光如炬,:P 😛 😛 我是个女的,答对了,嘿嘿,加十分。。。不过也可能跟我是水相星座有关,哪天有空8卦一下大家的星座。。。:) 😛


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兰若
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谢谢梦文,周末愉快。。。:)


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Originally posted by [i]兰若[/i] at 2006-4-30 07:04 AM:
谢谢梦文,周末愉快。。。:)

兰若, 不谢。谢谢你。你又想用星座来8挂吗?呵呵!:P
Have a good day!
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Originally posted by [i]梦文[/i] at 2006-5-1 02:52 AM:

兰若, 不谢。谢谢你。你又想用星座来8挂吗?呵呵!:P
Have a good day!
🙂

啥意思? 我以前有8卦过么?想搞点统计数据,这是我的业余research....


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这诗立意甚好,但文字似处处可见“旧作”的痕迹,眼下则老练得多了。:smile:

至于星座,要是你猜得出俺是什么,就服了你。:wink:


我的黑暗是一湖水,我的光明是一条鱼


   
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慵懒得活脱象个阳光下的小猫:)



   
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Sorry,兰若,想开玩笑,没有说好。本来想说,以前八卦(就是聊天),这次又想八卦,是用星座(就是用星座聊天)。用八卦,星座聊天,都没有错啊。到园子不就是八挂, 聊天吗?呵呵。:)



   
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兰若
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梦文,never mind.... 🙂


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兰若, thanks ... 🙂



   
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如果,一个人可以当三个人活;
一天当成三天,一生就是三生;
过完所有的前生,今生,来生,

该多好呀。


欲说还休,欲说还休。不说也罢。


   
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