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[旧作]蔡培国微型诗五首

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蔡培国微型诗五首
1草原一瞥

鸟儿飞走了
滴落的鸟鸣
长成了一望无际的草

2雪中观梅

它是孤独的 又是
幸福的
噍 那火焰在使劲地开……

3〈醉〉
揣着酒壶 将
一望无际的冬天
走成-----一株梅花

4古树

一颗寂寞的心 高举
衰怨的眼睛
打探春风

5听春雨

一滴便是一缕鸟鸣 一滴
便是一瓣花香
腌了一冬的心泛红泛绿起来



   
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喜欢这样的精致。配点图画上来:)

1、草原一瞥

鸟儿飞走了
滴落的鸟鸣
长成了一望无际的草

[img] [/img]

2、雪中观梅

它是孤独的 又是
幸福的
噍 那火焰在使劲地开……

[img] [/img]

3、醉

揣着酒壶 将
一望无际的冬天
走成-----一株梅花

[img] [/img]

4、古树

一颗寂寞的心 高举
衰怨的眼睛
打探春风

[img] [/img]

5、听春雨

一滴便是一缕鸟鸣 一滴
便是一瓣花香
腌了一冬的心泛红泛绿起来

[img] [/img]



   
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诗写得好,清新明快。图也配得好,图中有诗。呵呵



   
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这组不错, 图文都好~~~


沉默是金
http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/binghuablog


   
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蔡先生曾有"蔡三行'之称, 不过非马老师建议他突破"三行", 所以他不光写三行了。我很赞同非马老师,写自由体诗,没必要受几行限制~~~:wink::smile:


沉默是金
http://blog.sina.com.cn/m/binghuablog


   
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weili
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画面漫入诗行
撕开了

😉

这微型诗让我想起了日本俳句,两者有关联吗?


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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内容不错,形式更佳,确实像现代版的日本俳句。

没有必要拘泥,但这是一种风格。


因为我和黑夜结下了不解之缘 所以我爱太阳


   
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感谢多为老师的关爱,更感谢老师的配画,真美。蔡培国礼!



   
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Wow, wow!


是非是我非我


   
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诗中有画,画中有诗。:)



   
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weili
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回味无穷。


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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