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weili
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忽视你的眼帘
凝视你目光中的镜像

如履薄冰的日子
我依赖着你阳光下的
影子,忘记你曾经有血有肉

空对着你的魂灵
我放飞风筝
捕捉蜻蜓
种植果树遮盖我的思路

硕果馨香的时候
你来收集散落一地的
核桃,你的笑容青涩
铺天盖地

为力 2008,12,08


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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还真不错。最后两句好:虽然有点煽情



   
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大诗人夸一句不容易。我得更加努力。


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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种植果树遮盖我的思路
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呵呵好啊!


我的脑袋,在去年冬天,就被撞坏了,山野里,开满了白的花


   
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是有一定进步,不过你还不算诗人,虽然诗人很廉价,因为你还处于鹦鹉八哥的阶段。


我的黑暗是一湖水,我的光明是一条鱼


   
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章凝以前夸我青出于蓝胜于蓝。你忘了,我却铭记在心。:))

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因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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Originally posted by [i]weili[/i] at 2008-12-10 05:44 PM:
章凝以前夸我青出于蓝胜于蓝。你忘了,我却铭记在心。:))

我也记得哦。

不过干吗非要别人肯定才算呢?大诗人首先是写给自己的,自己肯定就是,才不要求别人肯定。自己说就是好来就是好,慢慢地别人也就不说不好了,说不好的是看不懂,水平不够,肤浅,低级,打翻在地再踏一只脚。厚厚 :smile::laugh:



   
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谢网花鼓励。
编辑小棣也说一首诗中,有一个佳句就非常难得了。他喜欢我13期文摘中的一句:“我垂钓夕阳”。

Originally posted by [i]再见渔网花[/i] at 2008-12-10 12:48 AM:
种植果树遮盖我的思路
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呵呵好啊!


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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“My novel was written for others, my poems were written for myself. ”

上面的话是鲁鸣的,我挺同意。不知周宇怎么看自己的诗歌?

Originally posted by [i]JL[/i] at 2008-12-10 02:24 PM:

我也记得哦。

不过干吗非要别人肯定才算呢?大诗人首先是写给自己的,自己肯定就是,才不要求别人肯定。自己说就是好来就是好,慢慢地别人也就不说不好了,说不好的是看不懂,水平不够,肤浅,低级,打翻在..


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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唉,你们争论得这热闹,我插不上嘴.看着诗人们讨论,不能不说是一种享受.



   
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Originally posted by [i]weili[/i] at 2008-12-11 01:20 AM:
“My novel was written for others, my poems were written for myself. ”
上面的话是鲁鸣的,我挺同意。不知周宇怎么看自己的诗歌?

小说是儿子,诗歌是情人



   
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一首诗里有一句佳句就是成功,这话是小弟说的还是我说的,反正挺耳熟。

此句确是佳句,多来几句,你就是湿人了,继续努力吧。


我的黑暗是一湖水,我的光明是一条鱼


   
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小说是脚印,诗歌是掌纹。

Originally posted by [i]JL[/i] at 2008-12-10 10:54 PM:

小说是儿子,诗歌是情人


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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不可比划!


我的脑袋,在去年冬天,就被撞坏了,山野里,开满了白的花


   
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为力这首诗真的不错。。。 加油~ :) 我又要闭关了。。。再谈~ 🙂


思无邪.


   
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