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顺时钟

越来越浓的中国式的黑暗
在她的顶点孕育新的光明

逆时钟

越来越弱的中国式的光明 (改为启明)
在我的头顶沉没最后的星



   
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很奇特的联想。



   
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weili
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越来越弱的中国式的光明

这个“光明”,能不能用“启明”替代?


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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启明,更好。
谢谢!



   
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weili
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这个诗人随和,我受宠若惊。:))
“长庚”不如“启明”好,对吧?

Originally posted by [i]xy[/i] at 2008-7-10 11:47 PM:
启明,更好。
谢谢!


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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好诗。晴山的图好像配倒了瞬时与逆时的黑白位置,但确有助于理解原文。



   
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