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怀旧 NOSTALGIA

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非马
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怀旧

西出阳关无故人
更何况绕了大半个地球

今夜的天空
挤满了
大大小小的人造卫星
却没有一个
载得起
我要给你的信息

NOSTALGIA

It's said there'll be no old friends
west of Yang Gate
I am now more than half the world away

tonight's sky is crowded
with man-made satellites
big and small
but I can't find even one
that can carry my messages
to you



   
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fanghuzhai
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It's said that no acquaintances
to the west of the border gate Yang Guan

此句有语法问题?



   
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非马
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Originally posted by [i]fanghuzhai[/i] at 2008-7-9 11:23 PM:
It's said that no acquaintances
to the west of the border gate Yang Guan

此句有语法问题?


谢谢 fanghuzhai 的质疑. 另一个论坛也有人对这两行提出意见,虽然是从不同的角度.我把它们改成了:
It's said there'll be no old friends
west of Yang Gate



   
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In the last sentence of the English version, could the 2nd "can" be changed to "may" so that 1) avoiding redundance; 2) 更接近英语的习惯?

Originally posted by [i]非马[/i] at 2008-7-9 04:23 PM:
but I can't find even one
that can carry my messages
to you


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