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【长话短说 节日快乐】结

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笨笨
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我在夜里打结
摸黑的时候,就知道我来过

可你用了一种解法。天未亮
我就在数着被迷失的时辰

阳光下
有各种迹象──
人们的创造,鸟的窝,豌豆开花
偷换的田野的颜色

我却丢失了所有的秘密
单纯得只是夜晚的影子

回到地上,积蓄温暖
一种蛮幸福的存在
低于一只小昆虫的眼界



   
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沙发了 :)
你是一只蜘蛛?谁能解开蛛网呢?
“眼戒”是什么?眼界?



   
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笨笨
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你也没睡吗。:)我这儿是深夜。
我不是蜘蛛。:)眼戒有眼界的意思吧。



   
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weili
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“人们的创造,鸟的窝,豌豆开花”

个人感觉用“人们的劳作”,更朴素一些。

笨笨好诗,非常温暖!


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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笨笨
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Thanks. Happy holidays to you all!



   
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thesunlover
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有味,不错。似乎有兰若的影子。


因为我和黑夜结下了不解之缘 所以我爱太阳


   
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笨笨
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Originally posted by [i]thesunlover[/i] at 2007-12-22 11:22 PM:
有味,不错。似乎有兰若的影子。

是陈先发 😛



   
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兰若
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喜欢~ 有点静寂的伤感,却 又偷偷的 甜着 ~ 祝大家节日快乐~:)


思无邪.


   
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(@zhaoyang)
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兰若、笨笨 -- 新年快乐!



   
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weili
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对,过年是解结的时候。:))


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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