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(@zhaoyang)
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纪事

阳光散漫。风烟散落在
屋栋或者山顶
或者在眉眼中间
一如秋末的心事
被人牵挂的红头绳就挂在门把
在你合眼的时候
有人用红绳的一边捆绑你
许多声音结在绳上
在另一个时节被人

开解。比如
天黑之前,阳光被树叶卷留
风吹过,树叶直落额头
阳光就这样击打你
留下风吹的声音
一如

许多年前,或者许多年后
某个人走进院落
抖动红绳的另一边
以此告知,除了声音和

风尘
绳结上结满风信子

李兆阳 2007.11.8-9



   
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weili
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给你配几张我花园里的风信子吧。:wink:


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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非常好。娓娓道来。阅读的愉快扑面而来。清晰如风。



   
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兆阳好诗



   
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thesunlover
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Pretty pretty:

"除了声音和
风尘
绳结上结满风信子"


因为我和黑夜结下了不解之缘 所以我爱太阳


   
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“绳结上结满风信子"

结满--

飘满,落满、开满......会不会比重复一个“结”字更好?


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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Originally posted by [i]thesunlover[/i] at 2007-11-12 03:15 PM:
Pretty pretty:

"除了声音和
风尘
绳结上结满风信子"

这首每句都好。每一句与每一句都好。后者更难得。
恰恰,我不太喜欢“风信子”。尽管那一句也好。
花当然入得诗,但如果诗好,花就俗。



   
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风信子虽然是花,但它的中文名字很具有动感,这使其不俗。:))


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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谢谢笨笨、况也、章凝和为力抬爱:大诗人高兴。



   
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Originally posted by [i]zhaoyang[/i] at 2007-11-12 02:18 PM:
谢谢笨笨、况也、章凝和为力抬爱:大诗人高兴。

别光臭美。:wink:
我给你提的那一字意见,接受吗?:lol:


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有进步,不再是月亮和水的老调了。


V。F。


   
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等李四开班授徒的时候,文取心可以报名,李四看看文兄可否作李四的学生。为力是不太够格的,破格收--看在校友的份上



   
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Originally posted by [i]zhaoyang[/i] at 2007-11-13 11:07 PM:
等李四开班授徒的时候,文取心可以报名,李四看看文兄可否作李四的学生。为力是不太够格的,破格收--看在校友的份上

李四之态堪比宜兴夜壶,嘴硬无比。


V。F。


   
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Originally posted by [i]zhaoyang[/i] at 2007-11-13 07:07 PM:
等李四开班授徒的时候,文取心可以报名,李四看看文兄可否作李四的学生。为力是不太够格的,破格收--看在校友的份上

瞎嚷嚷不行。
你赶紧扯起大虎皮吧,看有多少人响应。
也许只有为力一个。:P


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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大诗人公开开后门呀?:mad:

还有,到时候交束修,肥的行吗?:lol:

Originally posted by [i]zhaoyang[/i] at 2007-11-13 18:07:等李四开班授徒的时候,文取心可以报名,李四看看文兄可否作李四的学生。为力是不太够格的,破格收--看在校友的份上


因为我和黑夜结下了不解之缘 所以我爱太阳


   
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