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[原创]谣曲:月

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更其
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月光一树树落下
这是糖的时间

今天 她必然圆
我必然抬头
古人必然抬头

这样想着
我是多么安心

轻轻走过去
把月亮
关在门外

于2008/9/14中秋时分



   
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Baihe
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好美.



   
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“月光一树树落下
这是糖的时间”

月光一树树落下
这是饼的时间


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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“今天 她必然圆
我必然抬头
古人必然抬头

这样想着
我是多么安心”

今晚的梦象糖一样甜,月明了,心也静了。



   
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Baihe,好呀~:smile:

为力,你快笑死我了.天上掉馅饼么?

草叶,本来我想说,有些东西是必然的,你这样解读,很有诗意呵~



   
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民谣曲,是否更恰当些?:)



   
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民谣,我又觉得这首有些个人化,不够那么流畅,就半遮半掩地用了这个:谣曲.呵呵



   
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我想的是月饼,你怎么会扯到馅饼?:wink:

Originally posted by [i]更其[/i] at 2008-9-15 08:35 AM:
Baihe,好呀~:smile:

为力,你快笑死我了.天上掉馅饼么?

草叶,本来我想说,有些东西是必然的,你这样解读,很有诗意呵~


因为无能为力,所以尽力而为。


   
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再见渔网花
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 中秋

当你远道而来
一些空虚似乎被浸染

更多的雏菊
和仅有的一只杯盏


我的脑袋,在去年冬天,就被撞坏了,山野里,开满了白的花


   
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用帽子盛了黑夜进来,
啪哧一声把月光打翻,
牛奶沿桌面淋漓而下,
星光如一群耗子逃散。


V。F。


   
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渔网花,这"多"和"一"在一起,给人的感觉竟是"空".

文取心,这打油诗还挺形象,挺好玩的:)



   
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