静夜思
Thinking (Musing, Pondering) in a Quiet Night
床前明月光
The bright moonlight before the chair
疑是地上霜。
I take for frost on the floor.
举头望明月
Raising my head, I watch the bright moon; (I raise my head, watching the bright moon;)
低头思故乡。
Bowing my head, I think of my homeland. (I bow my head, thinking of my homeland.)
短短四个简单句几个错误:
(1)ID “海外逸士” 第一句:The bright moonlight before the chair 他把 “床” 翻译成Chair. 也不是他现在支持的井栏。 他自己译成这样,现在又说是井栏。那么我们可以理解为:他理解的井栏就是Chair.
(2)思故乡应该是:miss my hometown. 他用 Think of 意思:
think about/of someone/something
— phrasal verb with think us /θɪŋk/ verb (past tense and past participle thought)
A2 to consider doing something:
I’m thinking of moving to San Francisco.
B1 to remember someone or something:
I was just thinking about you when you called.
(2)I take for frost on the floor. ---I take it for frost on the floor.
因为他没有语感,所以几句简单句被他弄得既不押韵,没有美感, 没诗意, 也不准确。 最多得10/100 分 , 同情分。又 糟蹋了名诗。
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使君才气卷波澜。与把好诗再译
這裡的床,據有關人士考證,可以有兩個解釋。一是井欄;二是胡床,即椅子。我取第二解。
THINK OF 有幾個解釋?
IT 可省。詩句為簡短,經常省去可省的詞。
既然你提到我。我不得不進來。別說我不能進來。謝謝姑奶奶在找兼職這麼忙的時候,還化時間把我的帖子翻上來,讓新來者也能看到。真是功德無量。
天生我材竟何用﹖
I just saw your ID. I don't read your message. thanks!
使君才气卷波澜。与把好诗再译
Id海外。你那么老, 你进土时我进士。
你拿什么来跟我比?:)
我顺手写“赞小草好译” 又上了“诗词论坛” 置顶。
你拿你那些垃圾出来闹笑话来娱乐我们,我不反对。 :)
使君才气卷波澜。与把好诗再译
使君才气卷波澜。与把好诗再译
老外诗人对这个ID的烂英语的恶评:
“ yours appeared to be missing words, it wasn't just a question of syntax. You can re-order words in English but they still have to form a coherent sentence,”
“你似乎漏掉了词,这不单是语法的问题。英语你可以重新排列顺序,但你仍然必须组织一个连贯的句子。”
阅读点击:
[url] http://www.writingforums.com/threads/128367-Works-of-xlwoo [/url]
另一老外诗人评海外的译文: “Let it be English, I wouldn't read them if they don't make sense. I'd almost even prefer a dirty direct google translation vs. something which doesn't create the imagery of the poem.”
把它整成英语吧,读不通的英语我是不去读的。读你一点没有诗意,没能体现诗意象东西我还不如读Google直接翻译出来的无厘头,读不通的译文。
阅读点击:
[url] http://www.writingforums.com/threads/128367-Works-of-xlwoo [/url]
海外在中国人社区吹自己天下第一蒙骗不懂英语的中国读者, 手法肮脏, 同时他不择手段想方设法贬损各大翻译家企图去抬高自己的身价,手段卑鄙,无耻。多谢各位朋友支持我把这个ID扫下译坛, 还翻译界一个干净,清新的环境。
使君才气卷波澜。与把好诗再译